19 thoughts on “JOURNAL: WHAT NEEDS TO HAPPEN? # 2”
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. My three main points connecting with my stories are working well. I am not challenged at this point. Overall I think my dry run went well. After watching it, I think I need to work on going into more depth with my stories (use the full time I allotted myself) instead of feeling like I am spending too much time on one point. I think other than that, the amount of detail I used in each story I told was working. I also know that my peers told me that the flow of my speech worked really well, and upon watching it, I think so too. The second draft of my outline really helped me get into the flow, as it was choppier the last time I performed it. I need to keep practicing over break and really solidify my material. Other than that I think everything is working really well. I have a collage that I made on powerpoint in order to elevate my speech.
I feel that my speech is taking form as a combination of a remembrance and celebratory speech. The speech I want to convey is to talk about my papa’s life and how he influenced me as a human. After watching my dry run video back, I think the topics I communicate are flowing nicely. I think I transition to each point good and it does not sound too choppy. With that being said, I do have some grammatical errors when I talk which is mostly due to nerves. I really just need to focus on what I am trying to convey and just let it slip out naturally. I tend to over think about the sentences I want to speak which directly affects how it comes out of my mouth. I need to just keep practicing saying my speech over break to feel more comfortable, and I should be able to solve this issue.
After doing my speech while being video taped I feel a little better about it. Definitely need to tell myself I can talk longer and to not rush. I’m gonna try to work on extending the stories and slowing down when I talk. I am really excited to do this speech and see how it turns out. Feeling confident in this one because it should be easy for me to not look at my paper. To add on to my speech I have a slide show of pictures to add more understanding to it.
I did not attend class on the Friday before break, so, this journal is going to be rather challenging to write. I practiced my speech over the break once or twice to avoid any horrible delivery that I might have given if I did not rehearse. My speech is taking the form of a speech, one that has main points with sub points and even a couple of short stories in there. The idea is that my speech will have at least one of the people in the audience’s attention, most likely Jesse’s. I am not toasting my Mom, nor am I going over what I could have done differently if she were still alive, because she is still alive. This speech is simply going to go over the undying respect and gratitude that I have for my mother. I have no plans on elevating my speech past where I have built it up to. This is super tedious.
Before my delivery of my speech 3 the final one I have rewatched my dry run and it has no flow. I want it to feel like a natural conversation talking about someone you love the less choppy it is the better. My speech goal is to really give a toast to my mom at the end saying that I wouldn’t be the person I am without her so really giving off in my speech in a none forced way will make it better perceived. The biggest challenge and making it unique from the other speeches we have to show how this person influenced us and is important to us so I want to make mine different weather its the stories being different, the tone of how I go about it and even adding some humor or sarcasm which will make it stronger and more engaging for my classmates. In my dry run I was also only close to 4 minutes and the goal is 5 so expanding it longer so that the time dosent seem as quick or rushed can help benefit my speech and my grade as well.
My speech is a toast to my dad. Sticking with all my original ideas and some new ones that came from classmates are what is going to fill this toast. I really have had no challenges finishing up my final draft of speech 3. I think this process has been going really smoothly for me because I can go on and on about my dad. It is nice to be able to have so many ideas to pick and choose from but also making sure it is not too long. Just practicing a couple of more times before I deliver it is going to be key. Watching my dry-run I need to slow down because I think I am talking too fast during it and be a little bit louder so everyone will be able to hear me. Those things work with practice as well. I did change my organization of things I want to talk about and I think transitions will go smoother. This is going really well and I hope I am not too nervous when I go up to give my speech!
My second dry run felt good. Watching my video I like the layout of how I start broad then funnel into more detailed topics. Everything seems good just picking at the nitty gritty and working on my presenting is my main focus for my final speech. I have gotten great feedback on how my speech is not so lighthearted, that the more serious issues can be related to other peoples life. Overall I think I did good with not reading from my paper a lot, having a nice layout, and a lessons that I put in my speech.
For speech 3, I decided to talk about what my mom means to me. It is an informative speech because I want the audience to know about my mom’s great qualities and what she has done for me. My speech seems to be taking the form of a toast in a way. After watching the recording of my dry run we did last class, I feel really good about my speech. One thing that worked well was having a stopwatch next to me while I was speaking. This helped me to stay on track and ensure that I was making good time. Another thing that worked well was how I went into short detail about each thing that my mom has done for me. Since the first rough dry run, I have organized my main points and found a really good flow for my speech. Something I plan on adding to elevate my speech is some humor. In many speeches, adding humor really grabs the audience attention.
I definitely need to push myself to rehearse my speech more, it was easy to prepare with a partner because they were someone who in a way held you accountable. Since my recorded dry run I have added some pieces to my speech that has made me feel much more confident about the structure and flow of the speech. For the final speech, I need to remember to take my time and not fly through it all, especially since I want to be able to give the audience a full and meaningful understanding of who my speech is dedicated to. With the revised outline I now have and from the feedback I have gotten through both dry runs I feel as though my speech is headed in the right direction. The only issue I need to focus on is pushing myself to rehearse with some sort of audience.
To prepare for our delivery round, spend 20-30 minutes thinking and writing down what form your speech is taking, what ideas seem really good, and where you challenged at present. Watch your dry-run and take notes on things that are working and places you might recalibrate/rethink before the delivery next time. What needs to happen next? Where is this going? What are you going to do to elevate your speech?
After watching my dry-run I can already see where my speech is heading and I’m pretty happy with the outcome of my dry-run. My most effective parts were when I spoke from the heart and off-script so I’m going to try and be as off-script as possible for the final speech. I need to continue to polish my outline and update my portfolio. I also need to come up with a way to close out my speech, something that leaves the audience interested or intrigued or just impressed with my individual. That’s something I’ll definitely put a lot of time towards making sure the ending is well polished. Overall, I feel like I am in a good spot, and I think my dry run went as well as I could’ve thought and it really showed me what worked and what I need to improve on.
What I need to do to prepare for my presentation on Friday is to finalize those last minute details and stories into my speech, giving it more heartfelt understanding and showing exactly what my person means to me. I think I also wanted to add an overarching theme that is shadowed within the whole speech, showing the purpose this person has on my life, without them just being someone of importance or family to me. I think with these few corrections and critiques I can really excel my speech into something that will show the significance of my person on me and my life. In the presentation aspect of the speech I think I need to become more confident in understanding that I know exactly what I am talking about and to not rely so heavily on my outline, I have had this problem with all of my speeches, but it has progressed to me using it less and less each time. I think that with a bit more practice I can be pretty much go without looking down at the outline as much as I did during the dry run.
After rewatching my dry run, I learned that I need to lean more towards a less-essay based script and create more of an outline that I can utilize for my final presentation. I think my overall structure and content of my speech is where I need to be, although I think i can add some more information about how my person of interest influenced my life. I re-watched my dry run and noticed that I spoke to fast and did not look very comfortable, I will try to practice my revised outline more in order to be more prepared for the presentation on Friday. I also think I fidget too much, and move around a bit, so I will try to work on this next time. Additional content that I can add could involve painting more of a picture of the farm and the personality of the person I will talk about. I can also add more information about the legacy that he left, and all the communal help that he provided to my town, as well as the Portland region in general. Overall, I am feeling good about my speech and will continue to practice and refine it up until the presentation date.
After missing class on Friday due to family emergency, I had to film my second dry run. I felt good about my dry run as I did it to my friends once I got back cause I had to take care of my dad all break long. I felt my timing was good, however I’m sure that you can tell that I did say a few ums and uhs when it came to giving my speech. I also want to keep practicing so that my stories of my grandfather and I sound easier to say. I still want to work out some issues like formatting but I think right now I stand in good position. I have decided to add some pictures of my grandfather for speech so that the class could see just how adorable and how much my grandfather acts like me.
I was a little more confident giving this second dry run speech because thankfully I had added a few more points and included a little more of a story. I think it went ok and I got some good feedback. I need to keep adding more of a “body” because as of right now it is very short and quick. I’ve been around my mom for 18 years of my life. You think I would have some things to talk about at this point. It was also nice to listen to other people’s speeches as usual because it gives a nice little idea of how other people are going about their project. One person in my group today was also in my first dry run group and her statement was very nice to hear. She said she could tell my speech has improved already just from the beginning which was reassuring to hear. I am confident that I will be able to keep working on this successfully.
Though it was unfortunate to not be in class and perform my speech in front of the class and get feedback, I was still able to practice in front of two very different groups of people. I got good feedback from both, though I think there is still a little more to go. A few tweaks that need to be made, sentence structure that looks good on paper but doesn’t sound the best during a speech. I definitely want to be more confident and have more of my speech memorized as this is a rather difficult speech due to the more heartfelt material of this speech and being more knowledgeable about what exactly is in my speech will help when nerves start to act up.
After doing speech 3 dry run 2, I feel like I need to work on the body structure of my speech. I said in an earlier journal that I needed to balance out the information I have for each of my major points, that’s definitely something I need to focus on. I need to brainstorm more stories/characteristics about my person that I can add to these points to have a solid body. Once I do that I think that it will flow better and there will be more information to help keep the audience engaged. I also need a stronger conclusion, the one I had today was definitely better than the one I had on Tuesday, so I hope I can keep developing that.
After taking some time to reflect on my speech, I have decided to totally switch gears. I was not happy with my original speech. It did not flow the way I was hoping for it to, so I started to rethink and rework it. I want to utilize more stories and make it more personal. I felt like in my dry run, I was repeating myself alot and the speech was not very engaging. Hopefully by changing it up it will be more successful. I also want to add more stories from my childhood.
After my first run at my speech I realized that I want to switch gears and go in another direction. My thought process was to focus on the things my father didn’t do who made me who I am today. But I thought about it and that gave him a disservice of the father he has been my whole life through hardships and ups and downs. So I decided to focus on positives and not negatives I want to touch on all topics still to challenge myself but I also want to shine him in good light.
After reading chapter 25 and delivering my dry run, I wanted to do a combination of a toast and speech of inspiration. My dry run solidified that I need a more structured organization, to ensure that the introduction and conclusion are linked together, while the body and main points can fully support the beginning and end. My dry run felt like word vomit of just significant things my dad has done and the way those actions have impacted me, but there weren’t any clearly defined strengths. I plan to keep most of my introduction, including the details of my birth and the relationship between my dad and I, but I’m going to get rid of my family dynamic piece, because it detracts from the remainder of my speech. I believe I have all of the examples I would like to use, but I need to organize them as supporting points within my main points. I want my main points to be clearly identifiable as my dad’s strengths. I’m struggling a little with keeping the focus on him, because so much of this speech is how he has influenced me. I also have multiple hidden “Easter eggs” or inside jokes that I’m worried people won’t understand, but after rehearsing in front of other people, the feedback I received was that there wasn’t anything that was distinctly an inside joke that needed to be explained. Once I rework my organization and can clearly link my supporting points to the main points and the main points to my introduction and conclusion, I think my speech 3 will be ready for final delivery.
19 thoughts on “JOURNAL: WHAT NEEDS TO HAPPEN? # 2”
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. My three main points connecting with my stories are working well. I am not challenged at this point. Overall I think my dry run went well. After watching it, I think I need to work on going into more depth with my stories (use the full time I allotted myself) instead of feeling like I am spending too much time on one point. I think other than that, the amount of detail I used in each story I told was working. I also know that my peers told me that the flow of my speech worked really well, and upon watching it, I think so too. The second draft of my outline really helped me get into the flow, as it was choppier the last time I performed it. I need to keep practicing over break and really solidify my material. Other than that I think everything is working really well. I have a collage that I made on powerpoint in order to elevate my speech.
I feel that my speech is taking form as a combination of a remembrance and celebratory speech. The speech I want to convey is to talk about my papa’s life and how he influenced me as a human. After watching my dry run video back, I think the topics I communicate are flowing nicely. I think I transition to each point good and it does not sound too choppy. With that being said, I do have some grammatical errors when I talk which is mostly due to nerves. I really just need to focus on what I am trying to convey and just let it slip out naturally. I tend to over think about the sentences I want to speak which directly affects how it comes out of my mouth. I need to just keep practicing saying my speech over break to feel more comfortable, and I should be able to solve this issue.
After doing my speech while being video taped I feel a little better about it. Definitely need to tell myself I can talk longer and to not rush. I’m gonna try to work on extending the stories and slowing down when I talk. I am really excited to do this speech and see how it turns out. Feeling confident in this one because it should be easy for me to not look at my paper. To add on to my speech I have a slide show of pictures to add more understanding to it.
I did not attend class on the Friday before break, so, this journal is going to be rather challenging to write. I practiced my speech over the break once or twice to avoid any horrible delivery that I might have given if I did not rehearse. My speech is taking the form of a speech, one that has main points with sub points and even a couple of short stories in there. The idea is that my speech will have at least one of the people in the audience’s attention, most likely Jesse’s. I am not toasting my Mom, nor am I going over what I could have done differently if she were still alive, because she is still alive. This speech is simply going to go over the undying respect and gratitude that I have for my mother. I have no plans on elevating my speech past where I have built it up to. This is super tedious.
Before my delivery of my speech 3 the final one I have rewatched my dry run and it has no flow. I want it to feel like a natural conversation talking about someone you love the less choppy it is the better. My speech goal is to really give a toast to my mom at the end saying that I wouldn’t be the person I am without her so really giving off in my speech in a none forced way will make it better perceived. The biggest challenge and making it unique from the other speeches we have to show how this person influenced us and is important to us so I want to make mine different weather its the stories being different, the tone of how I go about it and even adding some humor or sarcasm which will make it stronger and more engaging for my classmates. In my dry run I was also only close to 4 minutes and the goal is 5 so expanding it longer so that the time dosent seem as quick or rushed can help benefit my speech and my grade as well.
My speech is a toast to my dad. Sticking with all my original ideas and some new ones that came from classmates are what is going to fill this toast. I really have had no challenges finishing up my final draft of speech 3. I think this process has been going really smoothly for me because I can go on and on about my dad. It is nice to be able to have so many ideas to pick and choose from but also making sure it is not too long. Just practicing a couple of more times before I deliver it is going to be key. Watching my dry-run I need to slow down because I think I am talking too fast during it and be a little bit louder so everyone will be able to hear me. Those things work with practice as well. I did change my organization of things I want to talk about and I think transitions will go smoother. This is going really well and I hope I am not too nervous when I go up to give my speech!
My second dry run felt good. Watching my video I like the layout of how I start broad then funnel into more detailed topics. Everything seems good just picking at the nitty gritty and working on my presenting is my main focus for my final speech. I have gotten great feedback on how my speech is not so lighthearted, that the more serious issues can be related to other peoples life. Overall I think I did good with not reading from my paper a lot, having a nice layout, and a lessons that I put in my speech.
For speech 3, I decided to talk about what my mom means to me. It is an informative speech because I want the audience to know about my mom’s great qualities and what she has done for me. My speech seems to be taking the form of a toast in a way. After watching the recording of my dry run we did last class, I feel really good about my speech. One thing that worked well was having a stopwatch next to me while I was speaking. This helped me to stay on track and ensure that I was making good time. Another thing that worked well was how I went into short detail about each thing that my mom has done for me. Since the first rough dry run, I have organized my main points and found a really good flow for my speech. Something I plan on adding to elevate my speech is some humor. In many speeches, adding humor really grabs the audience attention.
I definitely need to push myself to rehearse my speech more, it was easy to prepare with a partner because they were someone who in a way held you accountable. Since my recorded dry run I have added some pieces to my speech that has made me feel much more confident about the structure and flow of the speech. For the final speech, I need to remember to take my time and not fly through it all, especially since I want to be able to give the audience a full and meaningful understanding of who my speech is dedicated to. With the revised outline I now have and from the feedback I have gotten through both dry runs I feel as though my speech is headed in the right direction. The only issue I need to focus on is pushing myself to rehearse with some sort of audience.
To prepare for our delivery round, spend 20-30 minutes thinking and writing down what form your speech is taking, what ideas seem really good, and where you challenged at present. Watch your dry-run and take notes on things that are working and places you might recalibrate/rethink before the delivery next time. What needs to happen next? Where is this going? What are you going to do to elevate your speech?
After watching my dry-run I can already see where my speech is heading and I’m pretty happy with the outcome of my dry-run. My most effective parts were when I spoke from the heart and off-script so I’m going to try and be as off-script as possible for the final speech. I need to continue to polish my outline and update my portfolio. I also need to come up with a way to close out my speech, something that leaves the audience interested or intrigued or just impressed with my individual. That’s something I’ll definitely put a lot of time towards making sure the ending is well polished. Overall, I feel like I am in a good spot, and I think my dry run went as well as I could’ve thought and it really showed me what worked and what I need to improve on.
What I need to do to prepare for my presentation on Friday is to finalize those last minute details and stories into my speech, giving it more heartfelt understanding and showing exactly what my person means to me. I think I also wanted to add an overarching theme that is shadowed within the whole speech, showing the purpose this person has on my life, without them just being someone of importance or family to me. I think with these few corrections and critiques I can really excel my speech into something that will show the significance of my person on me and my life. In the presentation aspect of the speech I think I need to become more confident in understanding that I know exactly what I am talking about and to not rely so heavily on my outline, I have had this problem with all of my speeches, but it has progressed to me using it less and less each time. I think that with a bit more practice I can be pretty much go without looking down at the outline as much as I did during the dry run.
After rewatching my dry run, I learned that I need to lean more towards a less-essay based script and create more of an outline that I can utilize for my final presentation. I think my overall structure and content of my speech is where I need to be, although I think i can add some more information about how my person of interest influenced my life. I re-watched my dry run and noticed that I spoke to fast and did not look very comfortable, I will try to practice my revised outline more in order to be more prepared for the presentation on Friday. I also think I fidget too much, and move around a bit, so I will try to work on this next time. Additional content that I can add could involve painting more of a picture of the farm and the personality of the person I will talk about. I can also add more information about the legacy that he left, and all the communal help that he provided to my town, as well as the Portland region in general. Overall, I am feeling good about my speech and will continue to practice and refine it up until the presentation date.
After missing class on Friday due to family emergency, I had to film my second dry run. I felt good about my dry run as I did it to my friends once I got back cause I had to take care of my dad all break long. I felt my timing was good, however I’m sure that you can tell that I did say a few ums and uhs when it came to giving my speech. I also want to keep practicing so that my stories of my grandfather and I sound easier to say. I still want to work out some issues like formatting but I think right now I stand in good position. I have decided to add some pictures of my grandfather for speech so that the class could see just how adorable and how much my grandfather acts like me.
I was a little more confident giving this second dry run speech because thankfully I had added a few more points and included a little more of a story. I think it went ok and I got some good feedback. I need to keep adding more of a “body” because as of right now it is very short and quick. I’ve been around my mom for 18 years of my life. You think I would have some things to talk about at this point. It was also nice to listen to other people’s speeches as usual because it gives a nice little idea of how other people are going about their project. One person in my group today was also in my first dry run group and her statement was very nice to hear. She said she could tell my speech has improved already just from the beginning which was reassuring to hear. I am confident that I will be able to keep working on this successfully.
Though it was unfortunate to not be in class and perform my speech in front of the class and get feedback, I was still able to practice in front of two very different groups of people. I got good feedback from both, though I think there is still a little more to go. A few tweaks that need to be made, sentence structure that looks good on paper but doesn’t sound the best during a speech. I definitely want to be more confident and have more of my speech memorized as this is a rather difficult speech due to the more heartfelt material of this speech and being more knowledgeable about what exactly is in my speech will help when nerves start to act up.
After doing speech 3 dry run 2, I feel like I need to work on the body structure of my speech. I said in an earlier journal that I needed to balance out the information I have for each of my major points, that’s definitely something I need to focus on. I need to brainstorm more stories/characteristics about my person that I can add to these points to have a solid body. Once I do that I think that it will flow better and there will be more information to help keep the audience engaged. I also need a stronger conclusion, the one I had today was definitely better than the one I had on Tuesday, so I hope I can keep developing that.
After taking some time to reflect on my speech, I have decided to totally switch gears. I was not happy with my original speech. It did not flow the way I was hoping for it to, so I started to rethink and rework it. I want to utilize more stories and make it more personal. I felt like in my dry run, I was repeating myself alot and the speech was not very engaging. Hopefully by changing it up it will be more successful. I also want to add more stories from my childhood.
After my first run at my speech I realized that I want to switch gears and go in another direction. My thought process was to focus on the things my father didn’t do who made me who I am today. But I thought about it and that gave him a disservice of the father he has been my whole life through hardships and ups and downs. So I decided to focus on positives and not negatives I want to touch on all topics still to challenge myself but I also want to shine him in good light.
After reading chapter 25 and delivering my dry run, I wanted to do a combination of a toast and speech of inspiration. My dry run solidified that I need a more structured organization, to ensure that the introduction and conclusion are linked together, while the body and main points can fully support the beginning and end. My dry run felt like word vomit of just significant things my dad has done and the way those actions have impacted me, but there weren’t any clearly defined strengths. I plan to keep most of my introduction, including the details of my birth and the relationship between my dad and I, but I’m going to get rid of my family dynamic piece, because it detracts from the remainder of my speech. I believe I have all of the examples I would like to use, but I need to organize them as supporting points within my main points. I want my main points to be clearly identifiable as my dad’s strengths. I’m struggling a little with keeping the focus on him, because so much of this speech is how he has influenced me. I also have multiple hidden “Easter eggs” or inside jokes that I’m worried people won’t understand, but after rehearsing in front of other people, the feedback I received was that there wasn’t anything that was distinctly an inside joke that needed to be explained. Once I rework my organization and can clearly link my supporting points to the main points and the main points to my introduction and conclusion, I think my speech 3 will be ready for final delivery.