After our dry run today I am beginning to feel a little more confident in my speech. Taylor was in my group this week and last time we practiced our speech and she told me that can already notice a big difference in the content that I have. Personally I still feel like I have a little bit more organizing to do but that’s all part of the process. It was nice to hear mostly positive feedback and also stand up in front a group because it was a good soft launch into the real thing. Another thing I am going to work on other than re-organzing it saying it without looking so much on the outline. However this was still a dry run and so looking off the outline was expected. It was also nice to hear other peoples speeches because listening to their stories and kind of reflecting on how the spoke is helpful when thinking about my own.
During our dry run, I got a lot of good feedback about the speech and about where to go and what works within this speech. The use of stories, from the past and then now and how they relate. The overall feedback was that the stories were working within my main ideas and they flowed with the understanding of what I am trying to convey with my speech. I think my next steps are just redrafting and highlighting the importance of my person more, maybe creating more of main thesis about what the person means to me and show that with the story examples and examples of who he is as a person. I think that creating the main point to highlight the importance of the person will be beneficial to the overall connection and audience connection to my speech.
This time during class I felt like I had way more I could be adding but having this spring break in between the dry run and actual speech might be very very helpful. I know I need to work more on eye contact and making point and going off those points. Most importantly need to slow down and be calm. I added funny parts to my speech to make it easier for me to conduct the speech in front of everyone. I definitely have a lot to work on but I am fully ready to do this speech in front of my class.
My dry run went pretty well. I got good feedback on my speech and how it is very engaging and unique. I definitely feel as though I need to work on the flow a little more. Even though I got good feedback on the flow I heard some choppiness.
After the dry-run in class today, I felt way more confident. I think the dry-runs on Tuesday helped me gain my confidence more for today. After hearing feedback from my peers and also listening to their speeches, I know what to add to my speech. I got ideas for what to add and how to say things. I know what is working and I will stick to that. I also think it is really important to practice and I will do that before my final draft and final speech next time. Adding a little bit more detail and organization so it flows. So far it has been good and have been getting good feedback from my classmates. Their speeches also helped me come up with some ideas on what to add. I think it is good and a good draft/dry-run and I will be very prepared for when I have to do my final speech.
I think my dry run worked pretty well today. Everyone had some great feedback and I will tweak my outline a little bit in order to consolidate my points. Everyone said that my flow and outline worked really well and that the main points connected the whole way through my speech. I think adding my slideshow that I have will also give everyone a good idea of what my Mom means to me and how she has impacted my life. Her goals for me have furthered the way I think about myself and others, and has made me be able to advocate for my needs. She is the rock in my life and without her I think I would not be the person I am today, so I was glad I was able to convey that in my speech.
After presenting my more finalized dry run, I have a better understanding about how I would like my speech to flow and what needs to get added in to complete the speech. I was given helpful feedback from my peers and concluded from them a stronger conclusion is needed and a major story to support my main point should be added in. I think after these revisions are made my speech will be strong and live up to the expectations I hope to achieve. My person I will be talking about is very important to me and so talking about her is nerve-wracking since I want to convey how amazing she is.
Today went well. I hit the points that I wanted to hit, I would revise the order a bit to help with the flow. I got great feedback of how some of my topics are relatable, and keep people attention buy the audience being sympathetic and understanding. More details could be added but as previous i don’t want to say everything at once making my speech sound redundant to those who have heard my dry runs. I like how my speech is a toast but is also an after-dinner speech because it is has serious context and some light heartedness but reflects what I have learned from seeing my mom struggle. I don’t plan on having anything for the final like a cup, presentation, etc. I plan it to be just me telling my moms story.
During my dry run I struggled to choose from all the points I wanted to highlight. After the majority of the drafting I had done, I realized that I literally have a tattoo of a quote from my dad that is so significant in my everyday life. I plan to condense and sort through the supporting points and stories/examples to ensure they all relate to the quote, “ain’t nothing but a thing”. I think I will focus on the military aspect, because most examples I plan to use from when I was younger will be able to relate, as well as to my current relationship with my dad. I will shorten or completely cut out the point about my family dynamic because it really doesn’t add a whole lot to my speech and really only takes up time. I would prefer to use that time to have main points from my childhood, as a teenager, and present day; while incorporating the lessons learned.
After my dry run today I feel more confident with my speech, i defiantly tweaked it up a-little bit so to do that and receive such good feedback makes me feel like the work has paid off even if it was so little. The overall connection with the audience I was less jittering and off topic but really have to focus on sentence flow and not making it all over the place. My hands weren’t shaking as much as they would of the first couple of speeches so that shows individual improvement too on letting the speech come to me, the less words on the outline the better and I’ve took note on that and how with to many word its overwhelming in a sense where it gets confusing when to many topics are listed and leads me to rush through some when its more meaningful if I take my time with it.
I need to work on flow a bit more which I plan to do through just reciting my outline more, but I also want to add more stories and not just lessons I have learn from my friend. After further feedback and listening to others speak, a story or two explaining experiences with or about my friend would greatly help to understand and appreciate them better. Since I appreciate this person I want to really honor them in this speech, I plan to brainstorm a bit further on what makes them seemingly so genuine and content. At the beginning, I also plan to add more detail on how we met, kind of to set a foundation of how we clicked and the dynamics of our friendship. Currently, my outline is very broad, I need to add lots of more specifics, I think I am just afraid that I will bore people if I get too in-depth but also I want everyone to know how great of a person by friend is. I have lots of time over break where I will have more time to talk to them and I may even talk to them about only a few of the details in my speech since their perspective could help me build upon my main overarching points.
After doing speech 3 dry run 2, I need to work on the body structure of my speech. I said in an earlier journal that I needed to balance out the information I have for each of my major points, that’s definitely something I need to focus on. I really felt that I was struggling to add to my points during my dry run so I need to brainstorm more stories/characteristics about my person that I can add to these points in order to have a solid body. Once I do that I think that it will flow better and there will be more information to help keep the audience engaged. I also need a stronger conclusion, the one I had today was definitely better than the one I had on Tuesday, so I hope I can keep developing that.
After going through our dry run I feel like it went good for a dry run. I like I do need to stretch it out a little bit, because I only got to three minutes. I do enjoy this topic however, I think it will all be very good when it all comes to the final draft of the speeches. I also need to memorize a little bit more of my speech, I found myself looking down at my script a little too much and also forgetting what I was going to say at times. The flow was good except for a few times when I stuttered a bit when reciting. I am confident that I can add a few things and make it a bit longer and add more transitions to the speech along with a few more examples just to add an extra minute to the speech. Everything else worked well and I am excited to give the final product.
After the dry-run I feel like my stories are working and I’m really connecting with my audience. It helps to be able to talk about my individual without looking at anything because it feels like I can connect with my audience better. I think I’m at a good pace with everything, I think I need to add some more personal experiences about how my individual relates to me and how they have affected me personally. After adding that, I think I need to go over the content, organize it, and start practicing so I’m ready to bring it on the day of the speech. I feel like I need to work on an ending and a conclusion as well to appropriately wrap things up. My goal is to leave the audience with an understanding of how special this person is to me and have it stand out from the other speeches through the stories I am going to share. Overall though I feel good with where I’m at as I’m going to make slight improvements and polish the outline to be ready to go after beak.
After my second practice delivery in groups, I felt better about my speech. Since last class, I have tweaked the script a bit, and added some more examples of how my person of interest is important to me and further developed the impact that they had on my life. From the feedback from my group, they mentioned how I talked a bit too fast in the beginning of my speech, which I agreed with. For the actual presentation, I will try to slow down and make the speech feel more natural for myself and for the audience to experience. As well, they mentioned how I could add some more natural pauses to let the audience take in what I am saying. This was some great advice and I hope to employ it for the Friday after break. My group mates also mentioned how they liked the relationship I had with the person that my speech was about, and how I had some good stories and meaning behind these stories. Over break, I will try to further develop my speech and use some of the helpful tips from chapter 25 in the book about making a meaningful speech. Additionally, I will practice my delivery so I am more comfortable presenting it.
I am actually realizing that there is a lot more in common between me and my mother than I previously acknowledged. While going over different possible topics to discuss in my speech, as well as listening to the dry-runs of m other group members, I am discovering more and more how a lot of the ways she shaped who I was were positive in nature. I think I let the pain of a few negatives overshadow the greater, positive, whole.
I wasn’t able to finish my speech due to nerves and high emotions. But I received very positive feedback from my group. They like the direction I’m taking, and really like the storied about my mother, suggesting I try to add more personal connecting events that shows how close we actually were. Which I feel Is a great idea. I will definitely be adding more personal anecdotes, which I first thought no one would be interested in hearing. I also want to work on my terminology and how I actually phrase what I am saying. I also want to add a very short section explaining how our relationship isn’t what it was, and how even in the bad times she still had a positive effect on my character that outweighs the negatives.
After delivering my dry run of speech 3 in class today, I am feeling more confident about my speech than I was on Tuesday. I got some really good feedback; the audience thought it was a good speech, they liked the layout of it and how I flowed through each point. I am discovering that I do pretty good at following my outline without reading it word for word. One thing that is working is how I add a few details in on my own that are not on my outline. Another thing that worked well was my time, it wasn’t too short or too long. My next step for this speech is to make my outline easier for me to follow during my real presentation. I will do this by making bullet points for my key topics, this will give me a general idea of what I need to talk about during my speech.
After my first dry run speech, I thought that the person I was trying to talk about was going to be too difficult for me. My thoughts were all over the place, and I think a speech about my mom would be too long and emotional. After taking this into consideration, I chose to talk about a different person, my papa. This dry run talking about him flowed more naturally and I was able to connect my thoughts a lot better. With that being said, there are still more examples that I can add to make the speech a lot better. As I continue to construct this speech about a new person, I am going to keep brainstorming ideas and making a working outline until I am confident about what I am saying.
After having my friends record my 2nd dry run of speech three I feel a-lot better about my topic. My friends did however tell me to slow down and breath a little bit because at some points I talk a little fast. Also they told me to have a better layout and structure to my speech as it could help guide me more. They liked how I mentioned that my grampy and I are coffee hounds and likes the personal stories I included. One of my friends in particular liked the fact that I snapped at the beginning of my presentation, she said it was a good attention grabber and lets the audience know that “I mean business”. Although part of my speech is a little sad they felt that if I kept emphasizing my main point of the ability to care. After my speech was recorded, I received feedback and responded with “that’s partially why I picked a career path that cares for athletes so much” They sugessted that I include that at the end of my speech. Overall they tought the content was great but I need to watch my ums, uhs, and the usage of so in my speech. I think if I practice more it will come more naturally to me. But really need to work on slowing down and actually breathing.
After recording my dry run, I think I did pretty well. There are definitely a few things I need to change though. As far as the main points and topic, I am happy with how I delivered them. But, I want to tweak my set up a little bit. I feel like I should elaborate more on my main points, and add more supporting points and real life stories. I want to make my speech flow better and make more connections to my life. With a little more work and practice on this speech, I think it could be very successful. I want to be more calm while speaking, and try to utilize different words and rearrange some of my sentences. I did this speech in front of my friend, and she gave me some positive feedback which helped with my confidence.
My dry-run went well, hearing from the people i gave my speech to and how they felt about it helped me realize it was a good and emotional speech. Although it is not sad or happy it is almost informative and about myself i tried my hardest to give a good representation of the person i gave my speech about along with the ideas and points i wanted to prove to seem validated.
I definitely enjoy a lot of the points I brought up because they mean a lot to me but I think flow is something I need to work on because I’m not sold on the flow of my speech yet, topic to topic. After performing my speech, there were a few recommendations I received, eye contact was pretty poor, something I am normally much better at. I think this is more due to me not being fully comfortable with the speech yet requiring more practice. My body language was said to be pretty poor which I can see in the video so that will have to be fixed. I thought about adding a little more to the speech but I think the time was good so I may have to switch out a story or two.
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After our dry run today I am beginning to feel a little more confident in my speech. Taylor was in my group this week and last time we practiced our speech and she told me that can already notice a big difference in the content that I have. Personally I still feel like I have a little bit more organizing to do but that’s all part of the process. It was nice to hear mostly positive feedback and also stand up in front a group because it was a good soft launch into the real thing. Another thing I am going to work on other than re-organzing it saying it without looking so much on the outline. However this was still a dry run and so looking off the outline was expected. It was also nice to hear other peoples speeches because listening to their stories and kind of reflecting on how the spoke is helpful when thinking about my own.
During our dry run, I got a lot of good feedback about the speech and about where to go and what works within this speech. The use of stories, from the past and then now and how they relate. The overall feedback was that the stories were working within my main ideas and they flowed with the understanding of what I am trying to convey with my speech. I think my next steps are just redrafting and highlighting the importance of my person more, maybe creating more of main thesis about what the person means to me and show that with the story examples and examples of who he is as a person. I think that creating the main point to highlight the importance of the person will be beneficial to the overall connection and audience connection to my speech.
This time during class I felt like I had way more I could be adding but having this spring break in between the dry run and actual speech might be very very helpful. I know I need to work more on eye contact and making point and going off those points. Most importantly need to slow down and be calm. I added funny parts to my speech to make it easier for me to conduct the speech in front of everyone. I definitely have a lot to work on but I am fully ready to do this speech in front of my class.
My dry run went pretty well. I got good feedback on my speech and how it is very engaging and unique. I definitely feel as though I need to work on the flow a little more. Even though I got good feedback on the flow I heard some choppiness.
After the dry-run in class today, I felt way more confident. I think the dry-runs on Tuesday helped me gain my confidence more for today. After hearing feedback from my peers and also listening to their speeches, I know what to add to my speech. I got ideas for what to add and how to say things. I know what is working and I will stick to that. I also think it is really important to practice and I will do that before my final draft and final speech next time. Adding a little bit more detail and organization so it flows. So far it has been good and have been getting good feedback from my classmates. Their speeches also helped me come up with some ideas on what to add. I think it is good and a good draft/dry-run and I will be very prepared for when I have to do my final speech.
I think my dry run worked pretty well today. Everyone had some great feedback and I will tweak my outline a little bit in order to consolidate my points. Everyone said that my flow and outline worked really well and that the main points connected the whole way through my speech. I think adding my slideshow that I have will also give everyone a good idea of what my Mom means to me and how she has impacted my life. Her goals for me have furthered the way I think about myself and others, and has made me be able to advocate for my needs. She is the rock in my life and without her I think I would not be the person I am today, so I was glad I was able to convey that in my speech.
After presenting my more finalized dry run, I have a better understanding about how I would like my speech to flow and what needs to get added in to complete the speech. I was given helpful feedback from my peers and concluded from them a stronger conclusion is needed and a major story to support my main point should be added in. I think after these revisions are made my speech will be strong and live up to the expectations I hope to achieve. My person I will be talking about is very important to me and so talking about her is nerve-wracking since I want to convey how amazing she is.
Today went well. I hit the points that I wanted to hit, I would revise the order a bit to help with the flow. I got great feedback of how some of my topics are relatable, and keep people attention buy the audience being sympathetic and understanding. More details could be added but as previous i don’t want to say everything at once making my speech sound redundant to those who have heard my dry runs. I like how my speech is a toast but is also an after-dinner speech because it is has serious context and some light heartedness but reflects what I have learned from seeing my mom struggle. I don’t plan on having anything for the final like a cup, presentation, etc. I plan it to be just me telling my moms story.
During my dry run I struggled to choose from all the points I wanted to highlight. After the majority of the drafting I had done, I realized that I literally have a tattoo of a quote from my dad that is so significant in my everyday life. I plan to condense and sort through the supporting points and stories/examples to ensure they all relate to the quote, “ain’t nothing but a thing”. I think I will focus on the military aspect, because most examples I plan to use from when I was younger will be able to relate, as well as to my current relationship with my dad. I will shorten or completely cut out the point about my family dynamic because it really doesn’t add a whole lot to my speech and really only takes up time. I would prefer to use that time to have main points from my childhood, as a teenager, and present day; while incorporating the lessons learned.
After my dry run today I feel more confident with my speech, i defiantly tweaked it up a-little bit so to do that and receive such good feedback makes me feel like the work has paid off even if it was so little. The overall connection with the audience I was less jittering and off topic but really have to focus on sentence flow and not making it all over the place. My hands weren’t shaking as much as they would of the first couple of speeches so that shows individual improvement too on letting the speech come to me, the less words on the outline the better and I’ve took note on that and how with to many word its overwhelming in a sense where it gets confusing when to many topics are listed and leads me to rush through some when its more meaningful if I take my time with it.
I need to work on flow a bit more which I plan to do through just reciting my outline more, but I also want to add more stories and not just lessons I have learn from my friend. After further feedback and listening to others speak, a story or two explaining experiences with or about my friend would greatly help to understand and appreciate them better. Since I appreciate this person I want to really honor them in this speech, I plan to brainstorm a bit further on what makes them seemingly so genuine and content. At the beginning, I also plan to add more detail on how we met, kind of to set a foundation of how we clicked and the dynamics of our friendship. Currently, my outline is very broad, I need to add lots of more specifics, I think I am just afraid that I will bore people if I get too in-depth but also I want everyone to know how great of a person by friend is. I have lots of time over break where I will have more time to talk to them and I may even talk to them about only a few of the details in my speech since their perspective could help me build upon my main overarching points.
After doing speech 3 dry run 2, I need to work on the body structure of my speech. I said in an earlier journal that I needed to balance out the information I have for each of my major points, that’s definitely something I need to focus on. I really felt that I was struggling to add to my points during my dry run so I need to brainstorm more stories/characteristics about my person that I can add to these points in order to have a solid body. Once I do that I think that it will flow better and there will be more information to help keep the audience engaged. I also need a stronger conclusion, the one I had today was definitely better than the one I had on Tuesday, so I hope I can keep developing that.
After going through our dry run I feel like it went good for a dry run. I like I do need to stretch it out a little bit, because I only got to three minutes. I do enjoy this topic however, I think it will all be very good when it all comes to the final draft of the speeches. I also need to memorize a little bit more of my speech, I found myself looking down at my script a little too much and also forgetting what I was going to say at times. The flow was good except for a few times when I stuttered a bit when reciting. I am confident that I can add a few things and make it a bit longer and add more transitions to the speech along with a few more examples just to add an extra minute to the speech. Everything else worked well and I am excited to give the final product.
After the dry-run I feel like my stories are working and I’m really connecting with my audience. It helps to be able to talk about my individual without looking at anything because it feels like I can connect with my audience better. I think I’m at a good pace with everything, I think I need to add some more personal experiences about how my individual relates to me and how they have affected me personally. After adding that, I think I need to go over the content, organize it, and start practicing so I’m ready to bring it on the day of the speech. I feel like I need to work on an ending and a conclusion as well to appropriately wrap things up. My goal is to leave the audience with an understanding of how special this person is to me and have it stand out from the other speeches through the stories I am going to share. Overall though I feel good with where I’m at as I’m going to make slight improvements and polish the outline to be ready to go after beak.
After my second practice delivery in groups, I felt better about my speech. Since last class, I have tweaked the script a bit, and added some more examples of how my person of interest is important to me and further developed the impact that they had on my life. From the feedback from my group, they mentioned how I talked a bit too fast in the beginning of my speech, which I agreed with. For the actual presentation, I will try to slow down and make the speech feel more natural for myself and for the audience to experience. As well, they mentioned how I could add some more natural pauses to let the audience take in what I am saying. This was some great advice and I hope to employ it for the Friday after break. My group mates also mentioned how they liked the relationship I had with the person that my speech was about, and how I had some good stories and meaning behind these stories. Over break, I will try to further develop my speech and use some of the helpful tips from chapter 25 in the book about making a meaningful speech. Additionally, I will practice my delivery so I am more comfortable presenting it.
I am actually realizing that there is a lot more in common between me and my mother than I previously acknowledged. While going over different possible topics to discuss in my speech, as well as listening to the dry-runs of m other group members, I am discovering more and more how a lot of the ways she shaped who I was were positive in nature. I think I let the pain of a few negatives overshadow the greater, positive, whole.
I wasn’t able to finish my speech due to nerves and high emotions. But I received very positive feedback from my group. They like the direction I’m taking, and really like the storied about my mother, suggesting I try to add more personal connecting events that shows how close we actually were. Which I feel Is a great idea. I will definitely be adding more personal anecdotes, which I first thought no one would be interested in hearing. I also want to work on my terminology and how I actually phrase what I am saying. I also want to add a very short section explaining how our relationship isn’t what it was, and how even in the bad times she still had a positive effect on my character that outweighs the negatives.
After delivering my dry run of speech 3 in class today, I am feeling more confident about my speech than I was on Tuesday. I got some really good feedback; the audience thought it was a good speech, they liked the layout of it and how I flowed through each point. I am discovering that I do pretty good at following my outline without reading it word for word. One thing that is working is how I add a few details in on my own that are not on my outline. Another thing that worked well was my time, it wasn’t too short or too long. My next step for this speech is to make my outline easier for me to follow during my real presentation. I will do this by making bullet points for my key topics, this will give me a general idea of what I need to talk about during my speech.
After my first dry run speech, I thought that the person I was trying to talk about was going to be too difficult for me. My thoughts were all over the place, and I think a speech about my mom would be too long and emotional. After taking this into consideration, I chose to talk about a different person, my papa. This dry run talking about him flowed more naturally and I was able to connect my thoughts a lot better. With that being said, there are still more examples that I can add to make the speech a lot better. As I continue to construct this speech about a new person, I am going to keep brainstorming ideas and making a working outline until I am confident about what I am saying.
After having my friends record my 2nd dry run of speech three I feel a-lot better about my topic. My friends did however tell me to slow down and breath a little bit because at some points I talk a little fast. Also they told me to have a better layout and structure to my speech as it could help guide me more. They liked how I mentioned that my grampy and I are coffee hounds and likes the personal stories I included. One of my friends in particular liked the fact that I snapped at the beginning of my presentation, she said it was a good attention grabber and lets the audience know that “I mean business”. Although part of my speech is a little sad they felt that if I kept emphasizing my main point of the ability to care. After my speech was recorded, I received feedback and responded with “that’s partially why I picked a career path that cares for athletes so much” They sugessted that I include that at the end of my speech. Overall they tought the content was great but I need to watch my ums, uhs, and the usage of so in my speech. I think if I practice more it will come more naturally to me. But really need to work on slowing down and actually breathing.
After recording my dry run, I think I did pretty well. There are definitely a few things I need to change though. As far as the main points and topic, I am happy with how I delivered them. But, I want to tweak my set up a little bit. I feel like I should elaborate more on my main points, and add more supporting points and real life stories. I want to make my speech flow better and make more connections to my life. With a little more work and practice on this speech, I think it could be very successful. I want to be more calm while speaking, and try to utilize different words and rearrange some of my sentences. I did this speech in front of my friend, and she gave me some positive feedback which helped with my confidence.
My dry-run went well, hearing from the people i gave my speech to and how they felt about it helped me realize it was a good and emotional speech. Although it is not sad or happy it is almost informative and about myself i tried my hardest to give a good representation of the person i gave my speech about along with the ideas and points i wanted to prove to seem validated.
I definitely enjoy a lot of the points I brought up because they mean a lot to me but I think flow is something I need to work on because I’m not sold on the flow of my speech yet, topic to topic. After performing my speech, there were a few recommendations I received, eye contact was pretty poor, something I am normally much better at. I think this is more due to me not being fully comfortable with the speech yet requiring more practice. My body language was said to be pretty poor which I can see in the video so that will have to be fixed. I thought about adding a little more to the speech but I think the time was good so I may have to switch out a story or two.