21 thoughts on “JOURNAL: WHAT NEEDS TO HAPPEN? # 1”
My speech will be about my dad. i want to talk about the positives amd negatives he’s impacted on me. whats working well is the message, i dont wanna get up here and present a boo-hoo speech and paint him in a bad light. Hes the most influential person Ive had in my life and still is. we talk everyday on the phone while its not about how much we care about each other its to show him how Ive became as a man. I am going to talk about what he has taught me good and bad and how Im going to use it into my life. but i want it to be a toast. Because although he and my moms marriage ended he never stopped being a father and a damn good one at that. i want to work on how i will come across in the speech while the topic is harder to talk about i want the mood to be happy and bring an amazing light on an amazing person.
My outline was good, little improvement needed for the chronological order of it. My speech is about my best friend of 8 years, Daniella, so the aspect of growing up together and getting through life together will play a big role in my speech. I will be revising my outline a little to support my main points and have a better structure. I was given feedback to add in the stories about the experiences we’ve shared so I will be adding in those to support my main points and add background information about who Daniella is and how she has impacted my life. I am also thinking about including a slideshow showing pictures along the way that relate to the topics I will be discussing, however that is still to be determined. Overall, I think I am in a good place for my official dry run on Friday.
I slightly misunderstood what we were doing in class today, so I ended up writing my whole speech because I thought we were presenting. Nevertheless, I was able to get some great feedback from my group mates about my speech, which talked about my neighbor. It was also interesting to see how other people were formatting their speech, and who they were talking about for their presentation. From my discussion, I discovered that it would help to add more information on how Pops, my neighbor, influenced me and what I learned from him. It also may have run over the time limit, so I will try to focus on what is important to say versus what would just fill time. From their feedback, my groups mates liked the idea of me talking about my friendship with Pops, and the various stories and life lessons that I have learned from him. Additionally, I will try to incorporate some of the ideas and tips I learned about from the chapter 25 reading. In its current state, my speech is a mix of a eulogy and a toast, so it might help if I just focus on one or another rather than both.
I’m doing the speech on my mom, overall I heard some great feedback but really what stood out the most for me was being more relaxed when talking, and they were right. I have to remember that I’m giving the speech about the person I know the most not anyone els in this class so having a comfortable show could keep the audience engaged. Not jumping all over the place is a personal goal I’m going to try to set I tend to get antsy and move on from something quickly. I think it could hurt my speech if I didn’t elaborate on certain things and it’s just a skill I have to master and it would be a good place to start here. I also think the outline I have right now might be to short so having topics but also sub topics to try to make the perfect time of at least 5 minutes can be ideal. I defiantly want to portray the whole toast effect on my speech and incorporate how it is one. Tributing to my mom and all she’s achieved and really baking that up not making it just about a person but expanding on that idea of truly being special.
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. I start off with a story about my Mom and continue that format throughout. I know that my stories and the humor I import into them seems like it is working. My peers gave me feedback that the speech had great legs to stand on, which was nice. I think I am challenged to think outside of the box when presenting my stories, and trying to keep my audience engaged. I need to deepen my outline and really get into the main points of each story I tell in order to make the most of the short time I have. This speech is going into the process of making revisions. I started out with really broad ideas and need to narrow down what I am focusing on. I am going to talk more about my Mom’s impact on my life and her goals for me in order to elevate my speech.
My speech is not taking the form of a toast, eulogy or anything of the sort. Rather, it is a collection of reasons that show why I am grateful for my mom. The way I have organized the points that I will be touching on make the speech flow and build as it goes. I will begin by describing her importance in my life and how grateful I am to have her in it. Next, I will go into why her qualities are important to me, and finally wrap it up showing how grateful I am for her. I think this works really well in terms of structure, but I may want to make it fit in to a category mentioned in the chapter or in the assignment description.
I guess my challenge would be going into detail about what I am really talking about. I am not foreign to the feelings that I know would come up if I chose to go in full-depth, but I am a little nervous about that aspect for sure. At this point I have fully developed my second outline, so I will deliver the speech next time and see where that experience takes me. All of that said, I do feel great about giving this speech.
My speech is taking the form of a toast to my mom. My goal is to represent and celebrate her impacts and contributions to my life. I want to dedicate this speech to her as she is one of the most important and influential people in my life. In my speech, I explain how my mom has had many different jobs in her life, yet she has always stuck with the same passion. Her passion to work with and help children is genuine, and I want to connect this to my life and explain how this idea has stuck with me. My challenge is how to find the right way to do this. I hope to connect this by explaining how her views play into my life. I want to elevate my speech by bringing in more real life experiences to highlight my main point. I also think my next steps would be to add more subpoints to further develop my speech.
I feel as though the approach I am taking in my speech and the outline seems to be along the lines of a remembrance and/or celebration, although my friend which I am dedicating the speech to is still very much alive. I would rather want to have a slightly more cheerful or energetic tone since he is still alive, but I think that will come with a more solid outline and some run throughs of the speech. Through some feedback I heard from others I plan on adding more about how we met and what it is like having a friend who lives across the world from you. I was a bit challenged when presenting my dry run since my flow was really choppy, I definitely need a more solid outline because I have lots of content that I really want to talk about but that I either do not know where or how I will introduce it or if the audience will understand it. I also want to add some more personal details about my friend and not just details about our friendship since this is a speech primarily dedicated to him. For my next steps, I have all the content I need but now I need to sort it out and organize it all in a way that flows well and keeps the attention of the audience. I want to create a speech that feel comfortable and justly represents the importance of this person while at the same time not going off in a tangent about them. In order to connect well with the audience I will work on having an interactive introduction and keeping my content expressive of the person and of my experience being their friend.
I think I am going to follow to form I am taking now, with the ideas of an introduction, body and conclusion of the speech. This outline and idea direction makes the most sense to me, and my writing style, and fits the type of speech that I want to present to the class. The ideas and anecdotes that I want to expand upon I think will be the best parts of my speech, and having those will add much more depth to the understanding of why this person means so much to me. I think the challenges for me as of now is deciding what information will enhance my speech, and what will bog it down. When writing about a person close to you, it is hard to decide which stories or parts about them are important and influential to you. They are special people so just deciding what those will be have been hard. My next steps is actually creating a good outline that will help me create that 4-5 minute speech for class on Friday, deciding what I want to say is now what I am going through, and weeding out the unimportant things. To elevate my speech I think just making it personal and making sure the things I talk about will resonate with the class.
My speech is going to be a remembering of the good times. It’s supposed to be sad but I am gonna try to make it sounds good and happy. In my speech I’m gonna go over the good memories and how he made me who I am today. This is definitely gonna be a challenging speech because I’m not sure where to start or what good memories to add also. I always had a hard time trying to figure out how to word and put everything in a smooth transition. Gonna have a lot of stories to say and a bunch of people gonna be in shocked to hear most. I always dwell on the bad because he’s gone but I think this is gonna make it more better to hear about the good times.
For speech 3, as I’m preparing for next class I’m definitely finding some things that worked well and areas that need improvement. I think that my overall structure for my speech is good, but I do need to make sure a balance the time that I’m speaking about each of my points. I think that out of my three major points, I talk much longer about one of them and very little about the other two. I think that if I add more details and supporting information, it will help the speech flow better and should help me reach the time limit as well. I also need to work on my outline, right now it looks more like I wrote the entire speech out and then just threw in bullet points where it looked right. For this project, I really want to focus on having a good outline so I can feel confident while speaking and I also want to be able to apply what we have learned from the reading about creating strong outlines that aren’t too wordy.
My outline was pretty bare so there is some work to do but I have who I am talking about. After the dry-run, I used the input from the listeners, and I was able to put together most of the order I want to talk about certain things. I also have the basis of what i want to talk about, but I want to think of specific stories of how my grandmother helped to raise me to show her importance in my upgrowing. There is some sadness with my speech, so I plan on trying to find the right spots to talk about those specific things because they are important to the speech in my opinion. I don’t think talking about my grandmother will be difficult but there is a kind of pressure that isn’t the same as the previous speeches. There’s apart of me that is more nervous than usual and I think that is due to me not wanting my speech that is about someone I love to turn out bad. Very interesting construct but I think it will just add to my effort for the speech.
My speech will be in a toast style. I want to tell everyone about my dad and his personality/characteristics. My ideas from my first draft are really good and I will stick with those. I also will add stories and such to have examples of who he is. A challenge that I have is trying to organize it in a smoother way. Knowing when to talk about certain things is what I need to work on. What needs to happen next is I just need to organize, practice my speech, and add a little bit more detail. This is going very well so far because I have so many ideas that I can incorporate into my speech/toast. I am going to do all of these things to elevate my speech and my appreciation for my dad.
I’ll be doing a speech on someone special to me, everyone will have amazing stories about their individual and show us how much they appreciate this person. Knowing that my goal is to stand out from the crowd and take a slightly different approach. It will most likely have a toast style, but I plan on not revealing my person until mid-way through the speech. I need to continue to nail down my outline and be ready to go when we come back from break. I have a good start, and key points that I definitely want to hit, and I’m prepared for the dry run but still a lot of work that needs to be done. Not only to polish the outline but to bring in new ideas as well that will help elevate my speech and bring it to the next level. I have this story in mind that will definitely do that and I’m hoping to get more details on the story before I share it with anyone. Overall though I feel like I’m at a good spot and I am prepared for the dry run happening next class.
For speech 3, I decided to talk about what my mom means to me. It is an informative speech because I want the audience to know about my mom’s great qualities and what she has done for me. My speech seems to be taking the form of a toast in a way. Some of ideas that seem to be working very well are how my mom and I have bonded through dance, how she supports my decision to join the army, and how she got me through training. One challenge I plan to get over is the organization of my key points to help with a better flow of my speech. My next step is to write a rough outline that includes my main points. I will organize my points in a way that works for me and practice it to see how it sounds. If it doesn’t flow the way I want it to, I will reorganize and try again until I feel confident with my speech. Something I plan on adding to elevate my speech is some humor. In many speeches, adding humor really grabs the audience attention.
I think my first speech was a good start. It has the main points that I want to hit but doesn’t go into detail yet. My speech is about my mom and the struggles she went through but how she overcame each struggle. I also talk about my point of view, reactions, lessons learned from seeing her situations. My feedback was mostly needing more details and to go into more stories. I will but didn’t want to give all the details and stories from the being. Positive feedback was how my speech is not so light hearted, its a nice change of pace, also the lessons learned is relatable to most people in class. A challenge for this speech is the subject itself, talking about something/one personal. I do not like talking about me or personal situations so this speech will be challenging. I plan to do my speech like an after-dinner toast. Overall I think I have a good start to develop into a bigger speech to convey why my mom is special and important to me.
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. I start off with a story about my Mom and continue that format throughout. I know that my stories and the humor I import into them seems like it is working. My peers gave me feedback that the speech had great legs to stand on, which was nice. I think I am challenged to think outside of the box when presenting my stories, and trying to keep my audience engaged. I need to deepen my outline and really get into the main points of each story I tell in order to make the most of the short time I have. This speech is going into the process of making revisions. I started out with really broad ideas and need to narrow down what I am focusing on. I am going to talk more about my Mom’s impact on my life and her goals for me in order to elevate my speech.
My speech is about my dad. It is a toast to him. I believe my speech has good elements according to my group members from last class. My challenge with this was figuring which points to talk about to highlight my dad and his impact on me. I think what needs to happen is figuring out the organization of the speech and how to end it since I am not sure how to end the toast. I also think a few pictures on a slide show might help elevate my toast.
The person for my speech that I chose to write about was my mom. After looking at my outline after class, I realized that it is truly all over the place. I am not sure if I can continue to do a speech on my mom, as I just think it is going to be way too personal for me to share. It is challenging to talk about these things with the class. With that being said, I am deciding to switch the person I am talking about to my papa. My papa passed away in 2020 and I want to write a celebratory and remembrance speech for him. I think this will be easier for me to execute. My next step for this process is to start from scratch and write a new draft outline. By doing so, I can really freshen up my thoughts and convey a smoother speech.
After taking a step back from looking at my speech I realized that I need to form a better outline. Right now it’s a jumble of words. My speech is about my grandfather and if I’m being honest right now its a word dumb on a page. I need to reformat the layout so that I will actually be able to present my speech. I also need to add more personal notes to this speech. Right now it is simply just boring and seems like I don’t have any connection to my grandfather. So my real goal is to make my speech more speech like rather than essay notes. By doing this I feel like my speech will be more successful.
After this first dry run it has definitely become aware that I have work to do. I only had a few rough bullet points when talking today but I still received some good feedback. I was told which points to expand upon and that my intro was strong. This is helpful since an intro was like the only strong thing I had at this point, so it was nice to hear that it was solid. I do also need to expand on most of my points but it was helpful to see which specific ones people wanted to hear more about. My speech is about my mom as I’m sure a lot of people are and since I talk about how much my mom and I look alike I think I will definitely add a slideshow into my final product. I think it will be helpful to kind of put a face to the name. Overall I am excited to continue developing my speech since my mom is someone I care a lot about and I am happy to talk about her.
21 thoughts on “JOURNAL: WHAT NEEDS TO HAPPEN? # 1”
My speech will be about my dad. i want to talk about the positives amd negatives he’s impacted on me. whats working well is the message, i dont wanna get up here and present a boo-hoo speech and paint him in a bad light. Hes the most influential person Ive had in my life and still is. we talk everyday on the phone while its not about how much we care about each other its to show him how Ive became as a man. I am going to talk about what he has taught me good and bad and how Im going to use it into my life. but i want it to be a toast. Because although he and my moms marriage ended he never stopped being a father and a damn good one at that. i want to work on how i will come across in the speech while the topic is harder to talk about i want the mood to be happy and bring an amazing light on an amazing person.
My outline was good, little improvement needed for the chronological order of it. My speech is about my best friend of 8 years, Daniella, so the aspect of growing up together and getting through life together will play a big role in my speech. I will be revising my outline a little to support my main points and have a better structure. I was given feedback to add in the stories about the experiences we’ve shared so I will be adding in those to support my main points and add background information about who Daniella is and how she has impacted my life. I am also thinking about including a slideshow showing pictures along the way that relate to the topics I will be discussing, however that is still to be determined. Overall, I think I am in a good place for my official dry run on Friday.
I slightly misunderstood what we were doing in class today, so I ended up writing my whole speech because I thought we were presenting. Nevertheless, I was able to get some great feedback from my group mates about my speech, which talked about my neighbor. It was also interesting to see how other people were formatting their speech, and who they were talking about for their presentation. From my discussion, I discovered that it would help to add more information on how Pops, my neighbor, influenced me and what I learned from him. It also may have run over the time limit, so I will try to focus on what is important to say versus what would just fill time. From their feedback, my groups mates liked the idea of me talking about my friendship with Pops, and the various stories and life lessons that I have learned from him. Additionally, I will try to incorporate some of the ideas and tips I learned about from the chapter 25 reading. In its current state, my speech is a mix of a eulogy and a toast, so it might help if I just focus on one or another rather than both.
I’m doing the speech on my mom, overall I heard some great feedback but really what stood out the most for me was being more relaxed when talking, and they were right. I have to remember that I’m giving the speech about the person I know the most not anyone els in this class so having a comfortable show could keep the audience engaged. Not jumping all over the place is a personal goal I’m going to try to set I tend to get antsy and move on from something quickly. I think it could hurt my speech if I didn’t elaborate on certain things and it’s just a skill I have to master and it would be a good place to start here. I also think the outline I have right now might be to short so having topics but also sub topics to try to make the perfect time of at least 5 minutes can be ideal. I defiantly want to portray the whole toast effect on my speech and incorporate how it is one. Tributing to my mom and all she’s achieved and really baking that up not making it just about a person but expanding on that idea of truly being special.
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. I start off with a story about my Mom and continue that format throughout. I know that my stories and the humor I import into them seems like it is working. My peers gave me feedback that the speech had great legs to stand on, which was nice. I think I am challenged to think outside of the box when presenting my stories, and trying to keep my audience engaged. I need to deepen my outline and really get into the main points of each story I tell in order to make the most of the short time I have. This speech is going into the process of making revisions. I started out with really broad ideas and need to narrow down what I am focusing on. I am going to talk more about my Mom’s impact on my life and her goals for me in order to elevate my speech.
My speech is not taking the form of a toast, eulogy or anything of the sort. Rather, it is a collection of reasons that show why I am grateful for my mom. The way I have organized the points that I will be touching on make the speech flow and build as it goes. I will begin by describing her importance in my life and how grateful I am to have her in it. Next, I will go into why her qualities are important to me, and finally wrap it up showing how grateful I am for her. I think this works really well in terms of structure, but I may want to make it fit in to a category mentioned in the chapter or in the assignment description.
I guess my challenge would be going into detail about what I am really talking about. I am not foreign to the feelings that I know would come up if I chose to go in full-depth, but I am a little nervous about that aspect for sure. At this point I have fully developed my second outline, so I will deliver the speech next time and see where that experience takes me. All of that said, I do feel great about giving this speech.
My speech is taking the form of a toast to my mom. My goal is to represent and celebrate her impacts and contributions to my life. I want to dedicate this speech to her as she is one of the most important and influential people in my life. In my speech, I explain how my mom has had many different jobs in her life, yet she has always stuck with the same passion. Her passion to work with and help children is genuine, and I want to connect this to my life and explain how this idea has stuck with me. My challenge is how to find the right way to do this. I hope to connect this by explaining how her views play into my life. I want to elevate my speech by bringing in more real life experiences to highlight my main point. I also think my next steps would be to add more subpoints to further develop my speech.
I feel as though the approach I am taking in my speech and the outline seems to be along the lines of a remembrance and/or celebration, although my friend which I am dedicating the speech to is still very much alive. I would rather want to have a slightly more cheerful or energetic tone since he is still alive, but I think that will come with a more solid outline and some run throughs of the speech. Through some feedback I heard from others I plan on adding more about how we met and what it is like having a friend who lives across the world from you. I was a bit challenged when presenting my dry run since my flow was really choppy, I definitely need a more solid outline because I have lots of content that I really want to talk about but that I either do not know where or how I will introduce it or if the audience will understand it. I also want to add some more personal details about my friend and not just details about our friendship since this is a speech primarily dedicated to him. For my next steps, I have all the content I need but now I need to sort it out and organize it all in a way that flows well and keeps the attention of the audience. I want to create a speech that feel comfortable and justly represents the importance of this person while at the same time not going off in a tangent about them. In order to connect well with the audience I will work on having an interactive introduction and keeping my content expressive of the person and of my experience being their friend.
I think I am going to follow to form I am taking now, with the ideas of an introduction, body and conclusion of the speech. This outline and idea direction makes the most sense to me, and my writing style, and fits the type of speech that I want to present to the class. The ideas and anecdotes that I want to expand upon I think will be the best parts of my speech, and having those will add much more depth to the understanding of why this person means so much to me. I think the challenges for me as of now is deciding what information will enhance my speech, and what will bog it down. When writing about a person close to you, it is hard to decide which stories or parts about them are important and influential to you. They are special people so just deciding what those will be have been hard. My next steps is actually creating a good outline that will help me create that 4-5 minute speech for class on Friday, deciding what I want to say is now what I am going through, and weeding out the unimportant things. To elevate my speech I think just making it personal and making sure the things I talk about will resonate with the class.
My speech is going to be a remembering of the good times. It’s supposed to be sad but I am gonna try to make it sounds good and happy. In my speech I’m gonna go over the good memories and how he made me who I am today. This is definitely gonna be a challenging speech because I’m not sure where to start or what good memories to add also. I always had a hard time trying to figure out how to word and put everything in a smooth transition. Gonna have a lot of stories to say and a bunch of people gonna be in shocked to hear most. I always dwell on the bad because he’s gone but I think this is gonna make it more better to hear about the good times.
For speech 3, as I’m preparing for next class I’m definitely finding some things that worked well and areas that need improvement. I think that my overall structure for my speech is good, but I do need to make sure a balance the time that I’m speaking about each of my points. I think that out of my three major points, I talk much longer about one of them and very little about the other two. I think that if I add more details and supporting information, it will help the speech flow better and should help me reach the time limit as well. I also need to work on my outline, right now it looks more like I wrote the entire speech out and then just threw in bullet points where it looked right. For this project, I really want to focus on having a good outline so I can feel confident while speaking and I also want to be able to apply what we have learned from the reading about creating strong outlines that aren’t too wordy.
My outline was pretty bare so there is some work to do but I have who I am talking about. After the dry-run, I used the input from the listeners, and I was able to put together most of the order I want to talk about certain things. I also have the basis of what i want to talk about, but I want to think of specific stories of how my grandmother helped to raise me to show her importance in my upgrowing. There is some sadness with my speech, so I plan on trying to find the right spots to talk about those specific things because they are important to the speech in my opinion. I don’t think talking about my grandmother will be difficult but there is a kind of pressure that isn’t the same as the previous speeches. There’s apart of me that is more nervous than usual and I think that is due to me not wanting my speech that is about someone I love to turn out bad. Very interesting construct but I think it will just add to my effort for the speech.
My speech will be in a toast style. I want to tell everyone about my dad and his personality/characteristics. My ideas from my first draft are really good and I will stick with those. I also will add stories and such to have examples of who he is. A challenge that I have is trying to organize it in a smoother way. Knowing when to talk about certain things is what I need to work on. What needs to happen next is I just need to organize, practice my speech, and add a little bit more detail. This is going very well so far because I have so many ideas that I can incorporate into my speech/toast. I am going to do all of these things to elevate my speech and my appreciation for my dad.
I’ll be doing a speech on someone special to me, everyone will have amazing stories about their individual and show us how much they appreciate this person. Knowing that my goal is to stand out from the crowd and take a slightly different approach. It will most likely have a toast style, but I plan on not revealing my person until mid-way through the speech. I need to continue to nail down my outline and be ready to go when we come back from break. I have a good start, and key points that I definitely want to hit, and I’m prepared for the dry run but still a lot of work that needs to be done. Not only to polish the outline but to bring in new ideas as well that will help elevate my speech and bring it to the next level. I have this story in mind that will definitely do that and I’m hoping to get more details on the story before I share it with anyone. Overall though I feel like I’m at a good spot and I am prepared for the dry run happening next class.
For speech 3, I decided to talk about what my mom means to me. It is an informative speech because I want the audience to know about my mom’s great qualities and what she has done for me. My speech seems to be taking the form of a toast in a way. Some of ideas that seem to be working very well are how my mom and I have bonded through dance, how she supports my decision to join the army, and how she got me through training. One challenge I plan to get over is the organization of my key points to help with a better flow of my speech. My next step is to write a rough outline that includes my main points. I will organize my points in a way that works for me and practice it to see how it sounds. If it doesn’t flow the way I want it to, I will reorganize and try again until I feel confident with my speech. Something I plan on adding to elevate my speech is some humor. In many speeches, adding humor really grabs the audience attention.
I think my first speech was a good start. It has the main points that I want to hit but doesn’t go into detail yet. My speech is about my mom and the struggles she went through but how she overcame each struggle. I also talk about my point of view, reactions, lessons learned from seeing her situations. My feedback was mostly needing more details and to go into more stories. I will but didn’t want to give all the details and stories from the being. Positive feedback was how my speech is not so light hearted, its a nice change of pace, also the lessons learned is relatable to most people in class. A challenge for this speech is the subject itself, talking about something/one personal. I do not like talking about me or personal situations so this speech will be challenging. I plan to do my speech like an after-dinner toast. Overall I think I have a good start to develop into a bigger speech to convey why my mom is special and important to me.
My speech is taking the form of an introduction. I start off with a story about my Mom and continue that format throughout. I know that my stories and the humor I import into them seems like it is working. My peers gave me feedback that the speech had great legs to stand on, which was nice. I think I am challenged to think outside of the box when presenting my stories, and trying to keep my audience engaged. I need to deepen my outline and really get into the main points of each story I tell in order to make the most of the short time I have. This speech is going into the process of making revisions. I started out with really broad ideas and need to narrow down what I am focusing on. I am going to talk more about my Mom’s impact on my life and her goals for me in order to elevate my speech.
My speech is about my dad. It is a toast to him. I believe my speech has good elements according to my group members from last class. My challenge with this was figuring which points to talk about to highlight my dad and his impact on me. I think what needs to happen is figuring out the organization of the speech and how to end it since I am not sure how to end the toast. I also think a few pictures on a slide show might help elevate my toast.
The person for my speech that I chose to write about was my mom. After looking at my outline after class, I realized that it is truly all over the place. I am not sure if I can continue to do a speech on my mom, as I just think it is going to be way too personal for me to share. It is challenging to talk about these things with the class. With that being said, I am deciding to switch the person I am talking about to my papa. My papa passed away in 2020 and I want to write a celebratory and remembrance speech for him. I think this will be easier for me to execute. My next step for this process is to start from scratch and write a new draft outline. By doing so, I can really freshen up my thoughts and convey a smoother speech.
After taking a step back from looking at my speech I realized that I need to form a better outline. Right now it’s a jumble of words. My speech is about my grandfather and if I’m being honest right now its a word dumb on a page. I need to reformat the layout so that I will actually be able to present my speech. I also need to add more personal notes to this speech. Right now it is simply just boring and seems like I don’t have any connection to my grandfather. So my real goal is to make my speech more speech like rather than essay notes. By doing this I feel like my speech will be more successful.
After this first dry run it has definitely become aware that I have work to do. I only had a few rough bullet points when talking today but I still received some good feedback. I was told which points to expand upon and that my intro was strong. This is helpful since an intro was like the only strong thing I had at this point, so it was nice to hear that it was solid. I do also need to expand on most of my points but it was helpful to see which specific ones people wanted to hear more about. My speech is about my mom as I’m sure a lot of people are and since I talk about how much my mom and I look alike I think I will definitely add a slideshow into my final product. I think it will be helpful to kind of put a face to the name. Overall I am excited to continue developing my speech since my mom is someone I care a lot about and I am happy to talk about her.